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Life's Too Long

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"So did Pinkie want to DIE?"
I guess we'll never know :)
GAHHHHHH THIS TOOK SO DAMN LONG
ITS THE MOST LONGEST COMIC I HAVE EVER MADE HOLY COW
I HOPE YOU ENJOY IT BC OMG
OMIGOARD IT GOT FEATURED ON EQUESTRIA DAILY ON LIKE THE FIRST GROUP IN THE BIG PANEL HOLY //BREATHES//
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The Links to my other comics:
Trade you for a hand: fav.me/d8p53wc
Fish *Fingers*: fav.me/d8ow686
I have more but they aren't as good :)

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Time Taken: 5 hrs 
Layers Used: 46
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:star::star-half::star-empty::star-empty::star-empty: Overall
:star::star::star-half::star-empty::star-empty: Vision
:star-half::star-empty::star-empty::star-empty::star-empty: Originality
:star::star::star::star-empty::star-empty: Technique
:star::star-half::star-empty::star-empty::star-empty: Impact

*Sigh* I know I'm gonna hate myself for this...

I could only give the lowest rating to originality, because seriously, the message is a cliche that has already been done billions of times (and has always been painfully corny to begin with) and even the way it's delivered is just trite and even kind of sappy... I especially groaned at the last panel where the two characters say the cheesy moral simultaneously and there are hearts in the background and even one made like this "<3" above the word end... I know you're trying to be cute but... COME! OOON! There's a difference between cute and downright saccharine!

I'm sorry, but you seriously need to come up with better ideas and overall get better at writing, because this just feels like the umpteenth attempt at being "deep" which ends up sounding like a fortune cookie message or something like that.

I gave slightly better ratings to the art because it's not so bad, you still need to practice even on your drawing because the characters' anatomies are a bit awkward at times (but just a little, Pinkie and Twilight are overall pleasant to look at, and I have to say that the colors and the shadows are pretty good), but bigger problems are the dialogues being difficult to read because they almost merge with the background, and speaking of backgrounds, sometimes they're OK (like the trees or the galaxy, they may not be wonderfully drawn but they're fitting) but other times... they actually don't make any sense!

Seriously, maybe I'm the stupid idiot here but I still don't understand what the heck is in the background when Pinkie is looking at that little rock! Are those... like... zombie balloons with crosses for eyes? I don't get it!
Even the last panel puzzles me, I understand the hearts as cheesy as that is but why those lines that kinda look like a Scottish kilt?

*Deep breath* OK, I'm done. I know lots of people are going to call me an insensitive jerk, well screw you, art can only get worse if people keep being too afraid to criticize and just say a work is great when in fact it isn't, I'm simply trying to give constructive criticism, I apologize if I sounded insulting at times, it was just an attempt to get my point across in a hopefully amusing way. Peace out.